"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
In the above memorandum , According to the Business Manager of the telivision station It is better to restore the time given to weather and local news at late night in order to attract more viewers and not to lose any advertising revenue. The Manager comes to this decision based on the fact that after the removal of weather and local news from the late-night news program there were complaints from viewers about the removal and also the advertisers cancelled their contracts. However, before coming to this conclusion , Business manager might have to look into the following reasons which may also be thecause for the problems.
Firstly, Business Manger of Telivision Station assumes that the number of complaints have increased after the removal of local news and weather news. Perhaps, the total number of complaints actually decreased dramatically after the particular change in late-night news program and there are only (say 10% of previous complaints ) few complaints now. It is also possible that viewers might have complained about the misleading news about local politics and weather. If any of this is true, Then the authors assertion of increasing time for local news and weather news hols no water.
Secondly, did the advertisers back up only due to the removal of lacal news and weather news? Perhaps, It might have been possible that the advertisers are shifting their marketing towards online in view that most of their users are using internet more than telivision to get hold of the news. So, Advertisers have shifted their focus from telivsion to online websites. It is also possible that due to the bad condition of the market advertisers decide not to market for some time now. If any of the above examples hold merit , then the authors assertion is weakened.
Finally, Even though the removal of local news and weather news was the main reason for the losses of the company, Author assumes that they can avoid losses by doing so. Perhaps, the advertisers might have found another good tactic for advertising their business and the viewers might have actually realised the bias in the news after knowing about all the other news programs and comparing it with previous one. So, if any one of this remains true tehn the authors plan of reviving the previous news program might actually fail.
In conclusion, the argument as of now stands flawed .If the manager can provide more statistics about the situation then we can evaluate it.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.444 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.936 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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..., the argument as of now stands flawed .If the manager can provide more statistics...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00487804878 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48529022591 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453658536585 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5422714507 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.25 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.625 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343012780227 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131302255582 0.0743258471296 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100065622289 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197719724584 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131410777624 0.0628817314937 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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