A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processig companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author's assumption is about a 20-year study which indeed explicates the rise of commercial use of salicylates, there was a steady decline in the average number of headaches which were reported by participants. Furthermore, when the study was concluded, the food-processing companies discovered that the salicylates could be used as flavour additives for food and many companies plan to do so. Moreover, some health experts believe that the residents of Mentia will suffer fewer headaches in the future. However, before this recommendation can be properly be evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, are all the participants subjected to headache? Even if they did, are all of them consumed salicylates from commercial products?
In other words, it can be argued that some of the participants might have been treated naturally. Further, it can be also argued that this chemical(salicylate) can be found naturally in numerous food products. For example, salicylate can be found in fruits like cherries, cranberries, oranges, tangerines etc. These can also be found in vegetables, meat, nuts, dry fruits and regular intake of water. If all of them were certainly considered in one's daily diet, then it can be concluded that the assumption is false. Besides, regular exercise may also help to get relieved from headache. Exercises like yoga and meditation which helps to control the mind and body. If some of the participants exercised regularly then we can negate the author's assumption.
Secondly, are all of them were free from salicylate intolerance? The author states that the participants have completely relied on commercial products which contain salicylates like aspirins and medicine. What if some of the participants had salicylate sensitivity and they naturally cured their headache without any consumption of these medicines. Because medicines like aspirin have a high amount of salicylates approximately 325-650mg, and this could lead to having side effects on participants. Researchers believe that a person having asthma have high salicylate intolerance and if some of the participants had asthma then they are likely to avoid these products which have a very high amount of salicylate. This could also negate the assumption.
Third, is it possible for people with headache likely to rely on flavour additives or having them in their daily consumption of life? Well, just to get rid of a headache, people will certainly not buy food colouring for their treatment and it not possible for them to have it on daily life. Because food additives have some risk associated with it, like hypersensitivity, abdominal pain, diarrhoea and many more. This could be lethal for human beings on to their daily consumption.
At last, health experts assume that in future residents of Mentia will have a fewer headache. It can be refuted because a headache is inevitable if there is a daily consumption of alcohol, or due to lack of sleep. Even due to stress and consumption of processed meat can likely to get a headache. This can negate the experts' assumption.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumption. If author can answer above all three questions and offer more evidence, then it is possible to evalutate the viability of the proposed recommendation to have salicylate in food.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 541 350
No. of Characters: 2770 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.823 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.12 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.971 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 123 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 90 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.655 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.716 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.69 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors assumption is about a 20-year study whi...
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Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... In other words, it can be argued that some of the participants might have been treated na...
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Line 5, column 664, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ich helps to control the mind and body. If some of the participants exercised regu...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... helps to control the mind and body. If some of the participants exercised regularly then w...
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Line 5, column 735, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rcised regularly then we can negate the authors assumption. Secondly, are all of them...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...tes like aspirins and medicine. What if some of the participants had salicylate sensitivity...
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Line 7, column 588, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...have high salicylate intolerance and if some of the participants had asthma then they are l...
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Line 11, column 318, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'experts'' or 'expert's'?
Suggestion: experts'; expert's
... to get a headache. This can negate the experts assumption. In conclusion, the argume...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2847.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 541.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26247689464 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06780387658 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456561922366 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 920.7 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.5887379902 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0333333333 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112279826298 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318433328495 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365273980942 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06028044945 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040016299246 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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