SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision
To begin with, I would like to summarize the reasons for the shift of SuperCorp from Middlesburg to Corporateville. Firstly, the population is increasing in the Corporateville which makes it a more favourable place for the SuperCorps to live in.
Secondly, it says that the employees prefer living in an area which is not urban.
Well, it is quite scrutable that the employees should be satisfied to be able to give the best of their potential to the SuperCorp but let's not forget the fact that employees will keep changing from time to time and the headquarters cannot be moved every now and then. the shift of the headquarters should not be based on the mere fact that the employees aren't happy. the cost in the shifting has to be considered and the demand in that particular area has to be estimated. let's consider that after 5 years 60% of the employees are changed or replaced and the new employees prefer living in an Urban area. The fact that it shifted its headquarters because of the preference of the employees is quite ridiculous. in order to satisfy the need of the employees, their monthly wages could be increased or they could have been given incentives to working their skin out.
another reason for the shifting as mentioned is the fact that Corporateville has a surge of population in the recent past which is again absurd. one should never forget the fact that the facilities one can get in an urban area cannot be attained in a rural area. The ease of transportation of good or materials, availability of manpower, 24 hours of water and electricity supply plays a major role in a company based in an urban area. These factors easily compensate for the high taxes.
Moreover, there is no surety that SuperCorps will get 24 hours of water and electricity supply which makes it all difficult to even think of shifting the headquarters in a rural area.
In a nutshell, the shift as mentioned is a farce and will eventually prove to be futile
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 346 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.313 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.584 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.759 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.121 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.693 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...of their potential to the SuperCorp but lets not forget the fact that employees will...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...me and the headquarters cannot be moved every now and then. the shift of the headquarters should n...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ers cannot be moved every now and then. the shift of the headquarters should not be...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...sed on the mere fact that the employees arent happy. the cost in the shifting has to ...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...re fact that the employees arent happy. the cost in the shifting has to be consider...
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Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lets
...at particular area has to be estimated. lets consider that after 5 years 60% of the ...
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Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...at particular area has to be estimated. lets consider that after 5 years 60% of the ...
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Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...e of the employees is quite ridiculous. in order to satisfy the need of the employ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Another
...centives to working their skin out. another reason for the shifting as mentioned is...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
... the recent past which is again absurd. one should never forget the fact that the f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 345.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71304347826 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80544074872 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472463768116 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9402309433 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135333433613 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050296976447 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552595100808 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752731710152 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608015566156 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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