The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following
recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement
electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations.
Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and
punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or
recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to
detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees
from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall
profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and
what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the recommendation, the author proposes to monitor their employee's Internet use from their workstations, by installing a software that can detect Internet use on company computers. Undeniably, the ultimate goal of this proposal is to boost employees' productivity, which is benificial for the company. But several assumptions make the conclusion that the software will be efficient unstanable.
To begin with, the biggest assumption the author makes is that employees would wasting less time on the Internet once the software is installed to detect their Internet use on compnay computers. With the fast development of technology, nowadays people don't need computers to do personal activities like playing games or chatting online. All they need is a smartphone. Even if they stop using company's computers to do such activities, they can still spend time on their smartphones, which the company has no right to install any software to monitor the use of Internet. In that case, maybe the company can consider monitor Wi-Fi use instead of monitoring computer use.
Moreover, even if employees can not use their personal phones to conduct recreational activities, the author harshly assumes that when people stop wasting time on the Internet, they will spend those time on work. Employees may wondering around, or chatting with their friends in the company. The Internet use may not to be blame for the low productivity. In that case, installing software on computers may not help, since employees can still find other offline things to waste their time.
The third assumption that highly weaken the author's conlusion is that they assume that time spent on recreational activites has side effect on employees' productivity. It is possible that employees' work is more efficient when they spend some time to relax on the Internet. Employees could be happier and more enthusastic with their work when they are free to spend time on the Internet. The author need to figure out whether those personal activities are "waste of time" before the company decide to prevent empoyees from doing so.
To sum up, the three assumptions the president relies strongly weaken the practicality of installing monitoring software on company's computers. Before the author can prove those assumptions are grounded and reliable, their recommendation should not be taken by the company.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1949 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.17 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.769 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.605 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'waste'
Suggestion: waste
...he author makes is that employees would wasting less time on the Internet once the soft...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...elopment of technology, nowadays people dont need computers to do personal activitie...
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Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...creational activites has side effect on employees productivity. It is possible that emplo...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, still, third, thus, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34042553191 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87627783715 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462765957447 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1054654116 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.555555556 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218189570877 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811064614914 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582834598922 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143482340219 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282610278788 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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