The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the recommendation sent by vice president, to company’s president it is suggested that, in an effort to improve employees productivity electronic monitoring should be implemented to keep an eye on their internet activity. However before implementing this recommendation couple of question must be answer.
First of all, how to identify the employee who is using internet for companies work or for his personal use? Maybe employee is accessing his or her email to send reports to higher authority or he or she is using internet to get information about products sold in market by accessing some shopping website. Further there is a possibility that employee is visiting other sites on internet to get updates about companies progress. If either of these possibilities are true, than conclusion drawn from his recommendation is not supported.
Secondly, how is it possible to install that software in all computers in the company and not damaging the privacy of the employee without their permission? Maybe, keeping an eye on their activity is taking their privacy from them, which is an illegal act. There is an possibility that installing this application may lead to disappointment among the employees which may result to bad performance of the company.
In conclusion, recommendation made by vice president is not practically possible. If vice president is able to answer above question and give certain proves that how this will help to improve companies growth without disappointing any employee or harming their privacy than it is possible to think over recommendation made by vice president.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 255 350
No. of Characters: 1324 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.996 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.192 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.106 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.533 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.644 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...keep an eye on their internet activity. However before implementing this recommendation...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...either of these possibilities are true, than conclusion drawn from his recommendatio...
^^^^
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...them, which is an illegal act. There is an possibility that installing this applic...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 2260.96107784 60% => OK
No of words: 255.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32941176471 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16152377863 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560784313725 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2258105092 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.545454545 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396082786549 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145471704304 0.0743258471296 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119068669372 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240662231219 0.128457276422 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103552575022 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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