Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The argument is about Palean people who were thought to be inventors of Woven Basket. Author has put a claim that the Woven Baskets were made by only Paleans but also by Lithos. which is across the Brim River from Palea. Author further added that due to river being broad and deep, paleans should have travelled through boats only and no such boats have been found. Therefore, Author draws conclusion that there were not only Paleans who made those baskets but Lithos had also made the same. However, argument do not provide coherent conclusion and fails to provide strong evidences to prove the arguments valid due to following reasons.
No evidence is provided to validate the argument that the baskets was also made by Lithos. If is it so, Lithos would have made the baskets prior to paleans or around the same time as Paleans made but no such testimony found. Hence, we can not claim that the baskets were made by both Paleans and Lithos.
Furthermore, author has stated that Paleans Should have travelled to Lithos by Boats only. It requires proof that no other transportation method is used except boats such as rope bridges and if boats were used as a mode of transportation, then such boats should have been found but author has provided that no boats have been found contradicts the possibility as boast cannot simply disintegrates or sold to another.
Moreover, it is not claimed from the argument that the condition of the Brim river is same as before. Author cannot assume it to prove the argument considerable. May be at that time, it would be deep and broad and today may have different scenario.
Author has made assumptions and such assumptions need to be proved to make the argument coherent and considerable which is not done here. Thus, the argument fails to be considered as it stands.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1463 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.674 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.396 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...ade by only Paleans but also by Lithos. which is across the Brim River from Palea. Au...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ade by only Paleans but also by Lithos. which is across the Brim River from Palea. Au...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had made'?
Suggestion: had made
...lso made by Lithos. If is it so, Lithos would have made the baskets prior to paleans or around ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...to prove the argument considerable. May be at that time, it would be deep and broa...
^^
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and today may have different scenario. Author has made assumptions and such ass...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 313.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81469648562 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46868329424 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44089456869 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.1287127621 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1875 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5625 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253167256347 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909881378698 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770140168022 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134516159756 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100659245138 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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