Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The writer of this analytical has drawn the optimistic conclusion, from disjointed and incomplete data, that the so-called Palean baskets were not Palean.
A major gap in the given argument is the unjustified assumption that the river was deep and broad at the ancient times as like today. Likely, that river was not that much deep and broad as it is today in ancient times. Moreover, maybe there was no river between the ancient Palea and Lithos. Consequently, the people of Palea can easily travel to the Lithos and bring the Palean basket to Lithos with them. Here, arguer failed to provide the information related to the river's size in the past or its existence in the past, which diminishes the writer's conclusion. Therefore, the assumption that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean is unwarranted.
Even if we assume that there was a deep river than also the arguer can not make the hasty conclusion that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. That is because arguer unfairly assumed that Palean's people did not use the boat as archaeologists had not found any Palean boat. It is highly probable that there were boats in ancient time but it had made of the wooden material which is likely to degrade into the soil over time. Hence, archaeologists were not able to find it's traces because it may be completely composited and mixed with the surrounding environments. In the given argument arguer mentions that no Palean boats have been found, which means that other boats had found. At the same time, it is possible that other boats were the Palean boats and people of Palean had traveled through that boats and left it to other villages. Moreover, arguer did not mention that there was a difference between Palean boats and other boats, so it is unreasonable to assume that other boats were not Palean boats. Hence, using the boats Palean people had been traveled to Lithos with Palean baskets, which prove Palean basket presence in the Lithos. Therefore, arguer can not predict that Palean baskets were not unique.
Another lacuna is that arguer unfairly assumed that the people of Lithos never visited the Palean in the past. At the same time, the writer didn't provide any evidence about the inexistence of Lithos boats. Consequently, It is highly probable that Litho's people had been visited the Palean, and they bring the Palean Basket with them. Therefore, neither the absence of Palean boat nor the presence of Palen basket in the Lithos may be instrumental in proving that Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. Given the above, recommendation given by the arguer seems extremely unreasonable.
All things considering, it may be said that the writer has failed to make a convincing argument because of the complete absence of the needed evidence. No convincing reasoning is given. The writer needs to bolster the argument with information related to the river's past data and Lithos. Moreover, there is the requirement of evidence that can prove the absence of the Palean boat and Lithos boat. The argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic conclusion based on wishy-washy observations that are likely to be incorrect.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 527 350
No. of Characters: 2575 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.791 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.886 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.488 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.269 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.248 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...tence in the past, which diminishes the writers conclusion. Therefore, the assumption t...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...not uniquely Palean is unwarranted. Even if we assume that there was a deep river t...
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Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... the past. At the same time, the writer didnt provide any evidence about the inexiste...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...existence of Lithos boats. Consequently, It is highly probable that Lithos people...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 526.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00760456274 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56019776882 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.382129277567 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9144634102 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.307692308 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.46153846154 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16231537638 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057066862593 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546549087277 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947919973021 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516018831398 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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