Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nowadays, technological advancements have affected educational methods by introducing videos, computers and internet to schools. Some could claim that downside of such new methods is greater than benefit, saying that they could distract students from real learning. However, in this essay, I would argue that such new methods are beneficial to students if enough guidance are provided.
Admittedly, new educational methods including electronical equipment have some downsides. There are several researches that report using electronic equipment could decrease concentration of students. Such research proclaims that they discourage students to read books by giving easy ways for them to learn, and if such situation continues, it would make students uninterested to learning with great difficulties later.
However, new methods could be helpful if teachers could guide students with enough effort. Videos, computers could provide moving learning materials with sound, which were impossible with books. For example, it could be difficult to teach students about 3-dimentional geometry only with books containing 2-dimentional drawings, but videos could illustrate 3-dimentional geometry better by showing them visually. Furthermore, in modern society, it has been important to find knowledge and information from Internet. If we teach students well enough, it could help them learning by enable them searching what they want to know.
In conclusion, it would be beneficial to use technological innovations for educational purpose if we carefully use them. We could prevent students from being uninterested to studies that requires more efforts by encourage them to challenge to their limits by using more efforts, and then outcome will be better than when we only use books to teach students.
- Although innovations such as video computers and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students these technologies all too often distract from real learning Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree 50
- Colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country 33
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 569, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to learn' or 'learn'.
Suggestion: to learn; learn
...tudents well enough, it could help them learning by enable them searching what they want...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 265.0 442.535393258 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80377358491 5.05705443957 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95855795072 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569811320755 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3831775492 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.307692308 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162615331458 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064464902605 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375506562699 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106080604492 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435369911029 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.1639044944 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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