The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
A peaceful, harmonious society is the best place to reside. All people in the world carve for it. And hence, the society must always try to motivate its youth towards the harmony and cooperation. However, I find the speaker is a bit extreme in saying a society's welfare lies only in feeling of cooperation among it's youth not in competition. Of course, we have many evidences which say that cooperation is the ultimate key to success of the society, and it must be continuously supplemented by competition. Thus, I feel youth should he instilled towards cooperation taking competition hand in hand with it.
To begin with, cooperation creates peaceful society, away from fight, anger and war. There are various organizations in the world like NASA which would never have come to this place had it lacked cooperation from many scientists. Cooperation and co-working leads to creation of many new ideas easily and the group evaluates the worth of idea faster helpful in making good judgements. The great advancement in Astronomy sector is all because of mutual agreement among the scientists of various organizations which are working towards that field.
Additionally, in the industrial sector too cooperation is the best key to success. We can take an example of China, which was just a country of Asia a few years ago, and now is one of the leading industrial country in the world. At present, more than fifty percent of various goods around the world are supplied by China. All this is due to the agreement among the people, citizen and government of the country. Mukesh Ambani, an industralist based on India, is one of the world's richest person all because he was able to cooperate with his workers, the consumer and was able to direct his industries in the way he aspired.
Moreover in the government sector, when there is lack of cooperation, tumultous situation arises. We can take the example of Hitler, who refused to cooperate and led to the devastating world war which destroyed Germany.
On the flip side, we cannot deny the motivation which competition provides. All the above mentioned organizations, be it NASA, or country China, or Mukesh Ambani, had they not have sense of competition, they would have never achieved the success. Competition to be better that others, to achieve greater than others is the driving force which keeps people in track and doesnot let them strand away from their goal. Can we imaging the progress in human civilization; from stone age to this age of technology, in the absence of competition? At least the evidences show we cannot. All this development we owe to competition which is backed by cooperation in it's every step. The competition is the must, until and unless it turns out into unhealthy one.
To sum up, of course cooperation has great role in the progress of the society or the nation however we cannot deny the importance of competition which makes the people always driving towards their dream. And thus todays youth should be motivated towards cooperation taking along healthy competition with themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'worlds the richest'.
Suggestion: worlds the richest
...ustralist based on India, is one of the worlds richest person all because he was able to coope...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... his industries in the way he aspired. Moreover in the government sector, when there is...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...s driving towards their dream. And thus todays youth should be motivated towards coope...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, at least, i feel, of course, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 12.9106741573 271% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97859922179 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81537676856 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501945525292 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6635010204 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4230769231 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117587985776 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362506107907 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506430906125 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576740106795 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632519987269 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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