The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Better society can be formed by moulding the younger generation at their best. This can be done instilling good features into them. Statement provided by the author says that one need to instil sense of cooperation not competition into young people. I agree with the author partially , that is with the first statement which says to instil cooperation into younger people. On other hand I feel competition should also be insisted into young people for bright career.
As said, it is important to teach cooperation to the young people for leadership in any field. This quality can help them to acquire more knowledge and also to help people around them for their growth. In result, which helps in developing a better society. For Example, In a software company it is very important to communicate with each other, share ideas and spread knowledge, which can only happen if the individual have the sense of cooperation. Irrespective of fields this will surely help every individual to develop in their career.
Apart from cooperation, competition in one feature which can improve ones ability to think and do. Having a healthy competition in any field will result into a happy output. For instance, Students preparing for examinations or attending any sports event should be competitive enough to compete with their opponents. This competitive spirit can happen only if we teach young people the sense of competition. Having a competitive spirit will allow them to think in an enormous ways and will result in giving a best out of them. There are many innovations happening everyday such as, automobiles, having competitive sense in the people is actually allowing the different automobile companies to think innovative and come out with variety of features and innovate new versions of automobiles which can make our life more easy to live. Nevertheless, I understand why author stated not to instil this quality into young people. Because having competitive spirit can sometimes lead the young people to achieve their goals in evasive manner, which instead of helping in creating better society will lead to worsen the situation. Therefore, having a good competitive spirit can bring out the best out of any individual if implemented in a proper way.
Finally, author stated the important feature which needs to be instilled into young people which I'm completely happy with. As explained competition should be coming hand in hand with cooperation to get the best results from the young people. Having both can make the individual strong enough to be a leader in any field and grow in their career. Consequently we will have a better society which we are looking for.
- The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.“Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the co 69
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen 59
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eople. I agree with the author partially , that is with the first statement which ...
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Line 9, column 70, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...tition in one feature which can improve ones ability to think and do. Having a healt...
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Line 9, column 242, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...aring for examinations or attending any sports event should be competitive enough to c...
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Line 9, column 507, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...enormous ways and will result in giving a best out of them. There are many innova...
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Line 9, column 564, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...m. There are many innovations happening everyday such as, automobiles, having competitiv...
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Line 9, column 1226, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...st out of any individual if implemented in a proper way. Finally, author stated the import...
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Line 13, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...to be instilled into young people which Im completely happy with. As explained com...
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Line 13, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... people which Im completely happy with. As explained competition should be coming ...
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Line 13, column 347, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... in any field and grow in their career. Consequently we will have a better society which we ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, finally, first, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, apart from, for example, for instance, i feel, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2242.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10706150342 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73058889298 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46013667426 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4355785839 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4782608696 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264346880861 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873468090724 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596542618021 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18109608097 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357614678283 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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