Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Leadership in all fields is important as it is charged with the responsibility to guide an enterprise through difficult times. As a result, the issue of how to ensure the quality of leadership is not a trivial one in society. Some people suggest that. leaders should resign after five years as the success of one organization is dependent on its revitalization via the change of leadership. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with the viewpoint and I will present two points to support my argument. However, I concede that in some extreme cases, the stagnant leadership sometimes has some negative consequences.
First of all, when it comes to leading an enterprise in one field, experience matters a lot. The experience of leadership includes the ability to rise to challenges under stress, expertise in managing all departments, and a good understanding of allocating resources. The change of leadership within the limit of five years has a negative impact as leaders start to accumulate their experience only to be replaced by other people. It is a huge loss for an enterprise to replace someone with a great experience. Thus, it is not uncommon for a leader in one field to hold power for a long period of time. For instance, at the realm of business, Gerry Guo, the CEO of a Taiwanese Semiconductors company, has been in power for over four decades, leveraged his experience in business and electrical engineering to oversee the growth of the company. Replacing leadership to revitalize an enterprise after five years do harm on a company as it takes time for a leader to groom and accumulate experience.
Secondly, frequent transfer of power impedes the progess of one enterprise. For instance, in the field of business, many goals which take several years to realize are set up by the leadership of one company. If the leadership were to be replaced after five years, then the growth of one company is hobbled as long-term goals are no longer viable because when new leaders rise up, they may have blueprint for the success of their companies and refuse to continue progress made by previous leadership. This phenomenon is not limited to the realm of business. It can also be observed in politics as it is common for newly-elected politicians to reject the idea of extending policies which are proposed and implemented by their predecessors. As a result, frequent change of leadership tend to hinder progress of one enterprise.
However, in some extreme cases, the stagnant state of leadership has a negative influence on an enterprise as it might be difficult for a company to seek accountability of its leadership. Take politics, for instance. It is not surprising news when an autocracy got overthrown, the malfeasance took place under the regime, such as bribery or suppression of the opposition, got exposed to the public the first time as the public has no ways to ask for the responsibility of its leader who serves for a long time. Consequently, the revitalization of leadership is important for the success of one enterprise. However, I posit that frequent change of power is inadequate as it suffers the loss of talent of experienced leaders and engenders instability in one enterprise.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Leaders
...e in society. Some people suggest that. leaders should resign after five years as the s...
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Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...r in one field to hold power for a long period of time. For instance, at the realm of busines...
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Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'blueprinted'.
Suggestion: blueprinted
...when new leaders rise up, they may have blueprint for the success of their companies and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 58.6224719101 150% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2677.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99440298507 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09322225512 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455223880597 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 879.3 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3688685979 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.541666667 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215655157708 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663008624967 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520525141382 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141937802483 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181703324884 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.