Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
People are born with different dreams; everyone’s dream is unique and achievable when it is backed up by dream-helpers. It is true that young people are always advised to follow their dreams, but this is not enough to always getting mind-blowing results, their is need for people around to counsel based on their experience.
When I was growung up there is this popular dream among my peers, and that is to become: a Lawyer, a Medical Doctor, or a Pharmacist. I grew with the mentality that those professions will make one to be a great person, and people around me will lionize me. Though I hate injection or seeing a dead body, but I stiill want to go for it not minding my fears. I appreciate one of my uncle who counselled me on that faithful day; enlightened me that “to be great in life is not just about doing what you think is right, but it is about one doing what you are good at; that will benefit you, and your community”. I might have ended up pursuing being a Medical Doctor that I would not eventually have the concern for people but just to popularize me and also to be rich.
Some individuals have choosed some course in school that does not really worth their effort; they are regretting it. A banker in Nigeria once says and I paraphrased that “all the time I spent in my early days in school were just wasted”. This is because he studied Biochemistry because he just loves the name “Biochemist”. On finishing his undergraduate he faced the reality and understood that good life is not just about acquiring the name. He later end up doing another undergraduate course, which he later folowed with passsion and was of great help to His community.
While some may say this is not true, if you see anyone not being fufilled in their career, check their motive for choosing the career. This is why proper guidiance is needed for young people dreaming, so that they get it right before it is too late and for early productivity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...to always getting mind-blowing results, their is need for people around to counsel ba...
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Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'ends'.
Suggestion: ends
...just about acquiring the name. He later end up doing another undergraduate course, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 352.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58806818182 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65388810889 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539772727273 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.30850829 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.357142857 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146572516254 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461562663174 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396855728315 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879703249278 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493603583181 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.