Claim: While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self-satisfaction, it should really be a source of embarrassment.
Reason: Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based
While boredom is very natural human psyche may arise from many sources and often expressed with a sense of self-satisfaction, many claim that it should be regarded as the source of embarrassment. This perception doesn’t hold water in every cases and I mostly disagree with the claim for three reasons.
Firstly, the claim is stating that lack of imagination and self-motivation are the main reasons of ennui. These reasoning may hold true in some particular cases because most of the aimless people play the victim role of boredom. Unlike this boredom may also arise from lack of exciting work or work which drains the worker. Most of the cases, person’s work does not happen as per his choice. Let’s take an example of work of computer scientist who is fond of arts and literature and adventure. He loves to imagine his life as an artist, bard or simply nomadic but he cannot follow his passion because he must continue the seemingly boring programming for his high standard living. Will it be very unnatural for him to feel bored in this periphery? Obviously not. Here lack of self- motivation and creativity cannot justify the sense of boredom but lack of opportunity of pleasure in work. Here boredom should not be source of embarrassment.
In contrast to the claim, we can show the activity of a physicist. A physicist must be creative and must have profound imaginative power to glean idea about the physical world and also the world beyond our sight. He need not only to explain these theoretically but also need to prove those theories through real life experiment. In this circumstance, failure is an inseparable part. If the physicist fails in experiment, he must feel bored and unenthusiastic. In this scenario, boredom is not an embarrassing feeling, rather it should be overcome.
Additionally, not only in the life of people of specialized field but also in ordinary people’s life boredom may appear and resurgence at any time. Sometimes we can account the pedestrian thinking and motionless life style as the reasons of boredom for layman and it’s really embarrassing. But it does not represent the true scenario always. Any persons can suffer from boredom due to his or her surrounding environment, behavior of the people in his or her circle. Oftentimes people feel bored for no reason. For example, if one person become ostracized from social life and he has no one to talk to him, then he will feel depressed and bored naturally. He should not be embarrassed and society should help him to return the tide of life. From these evidence it can be stated that boredom is a natural feeling intrigued by different factors, always not by lack of creativity and motivation and should not be indicated always as the source of embarrassment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'many claims'.
Suggestion: many claims
...ssed with a sense of self-satisfaction, many claim that it should be regarded as the sourc...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'overcome'?
Suggestion: overcome
...barrassing feeling, rather it should be overcome. Additionally, not only in the life of...
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Line 4, column 334, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...it does not represent the true scenario always. Any persons can suffer from boredom du...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, so, then, thus, while, for example, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92505353319 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85594188262 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503211991435 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6560352198 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.68 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 5.13820224719 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286745630479 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778179157551 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892522155809 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184527588971 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791210747682 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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