Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Success is not just the amount of money or the other assets earned, but rather it the internal satisfaction and peace of mind that make someone feel success. It can be inferred, implicitly, from the prompt that students should only persue the fields they are likely to succeed, it can be viewed as an attempt to restrict the students from acheiving some unbelievable things in life. So, I strongly disagree the suggestion for two reasons.
To begin with, in today's world where there are so many technological advancement almost everyday, things changes almost in every month or say year, interest of people also changes accordingly. Additionally, being in a school or college where students are in the most adaptive stage of their life, it becomes almost impossible to remain consistant with their interest. A field which a student finds interest in, could probbaly be most disinterested for the field, once he or she start to explore different field to excel in his or her career. So, it is unlikely to decide whether a specific field suit the a person to make a successful career. For instance, a survey conducted by American Educational Society (AES), shows that the population which followed the path of success as guided by the educational institution lead to a more unsuccessful and unhappy life as compared to the students who did not the path shown by the intitution.Therefore, students should be allowed to decide their field of study on their own leading them to a successful and happy.
Further, following only the path persuaded by the educational institutions may lead to a successful life, but it prohibits the students for attempting to acheive extraordinay success in the life. A person can always become something, only if he or she put the required efforts, in life which he or she has never believed to become. While studing in school or college not every characteristics of of an individuals personality. There are always some personality traits that cannot be explored in the boundaries of a classrooom. These traits requires some real world situations or conditions that cannot be created in the class. To explore these traits one needs to go beyound the class to indentify the really personality and to determine what exactly the person wants in his or her life. This can be exemplified by a real world example of Bill Gates, one of the richest person in this world, who is the founded of Microsoft Coporation. While studying in a top class university, Harved University, he took a break and decide to start a company, which probably won't be the goal set by his education institution. Imagine if he would had followed the same path shown by his institution. Thus, history tells us that to become a highly successful person on should not only blindly follow the path suggested by the educaatrional intitutions.
However, it can be argued that educational intitutions can prepare the students for the field they are more likely to be successful in, by training them in right direction and constantly motivating them to do betterr in the field. But, even is they excels in that field, doesn't necessarily means that the persons can acheive the highest level of success only in that field. Possibily, there can be other field which the educational institute failed to indentify in which a student can acheive much more than predicted by the educational insitutions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
...ion and peace of mind that make someone feel success. It can be inferred, implicitl...
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Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advancement seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much technological advancement', 'a good deal of technological advancement'.
Suggestion: much technological advancement; a good deal of technological advancement
...ith, in todays world where there are so many technological advancement almost everyday, things changes almost ...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...o many technological advancement almost everyday, things changes almost in every month o...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...nterested for the field, once he or she start to explore different field to excel in ...
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Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...to decide whether a specific field suit the a person to make a successful career. For...
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Line 3, column 935, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...id not the path shown by the intitution.Therefore, students should be allowed to decide t...
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Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...ol or college not every characteristics of of an individuals personality. There are a...
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Line 5, column 404, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...lege not every characteristics of of an individuals personality. There are always some pers...
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Line 5, column 542, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'require'.
Suggestion: require
...oundaries of a classrooom. These traits requires some real world situations or condition...
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Line 5, column 1132, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...cation institution. Imagine if he would had followed the same path shown by his ins...
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Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'excel'
Suggestion: excel
...betterr in the field. But, even is they excels in that field, doesnt necessarily means...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...But, even is they excels in that field, doesnt necessarily means that the persons can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2826.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97535211268 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93699070089 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471830985915 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 894.6 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.4995269357 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.571428571 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0476190476 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257562722558 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698384304973 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813698570832 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172398273343 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602793503481 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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