Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In the 14th century, Renaissance which began in Florence, Italy swept across Europe and led a revolution aginst the doctrine of the church. The basic essence of Renaissance was art itself, which harnessed the poitential of art through literary works and paintings. The prompt recommends that governments should give equitable investment in arts as compared to military. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the given recommendation and argue that art must be provided with as much investment as military.
First of all, art is the form of expressing one's views and feelings. There are plethora of instances such as literary works, paintings, sculptors and monuments, etc, which are great works of art, expressing the artist. For instance, Leonardo davinci, perhaps the greatest artist ever, led the Renaissance through his cannonical paintings. The human body and Mona Lisa which are revered even today. It provides us a way to express our views and feelings in an innovative way, easily discerned by the audience. This example illustrates how art, as a form of expression, plays a vital role.
Secondly, art enables us to overcome the anachronistic boundaries. They are key peices of findings, which have great historical importance. They can be analyzed to learn about historical past in general. For instance, the autobiographical account of Toto chan, a small girl from Hiroshima-Nagasaki province of Japan, helps us to apprehend the prevailing situation during WW2. It enables us to 'virtually' time travel to past. Another instance is the great literary works of Charles Dickenson, which portrays the society of pre industrial revolution Britain. This illutrates how art holds historical importance.
Furthermore, art is ubiquitous. We cannot avoid art in any form, through all facades of life. Art encourages imagination. It is great source to develop skills such as profoundess, innovation and literture. For instance, the Taj Mahal, one of wonders of the world, is a perrenial symbol of art, attracting millions of tourists from all over the world. This illutrates how art along with a form, acts as a source of income many artisans and artists.
Of course, some might argue than national security aspect precedes all other priorities and that utmost invests must be ventured in military. I agree that military is paramount for any nation and that it must not face brevity of investments. However, art must not be ignored all together. We must provide succifienct investments so as to promote art and encourge artists to excell in their firls of interest, due to sheer potential of art. An 'artless' society would not be what we are today.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, in general, of course, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21261682243 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9704734925 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567757009346 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.549981756 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6785714286 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82142857143 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183419424941 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491604486351 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394904524787 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104792358755 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052170257971 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.