The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The idea that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from becoming strong and independent is an interesting idea to discuss. I mostly agree with the statement. As it will become apparent in this essay, I will explain details about my position on this issue.
The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life make people become dependent individuals. To illustrate, because of the advent of washing machines, I do not have to wash clothes by hand. This saves my time. However, if my washing machine breaks, I have to wash by hand. This means that I will have to spend more than an hour washing all my clothes. I also have less time to do other things, such as checking my students’ homework or reading books. Therefore, I become reliant on the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life.
I agree with the statement because the luxuries and conveniences, such as technology can become inconvenient. For example, I cannot leave home without my smartphone because of my job. I need my smartphone for arranging and confirming my teaching schedules. Hence, I am obliged to respond when the school contacts me, and, in this manner, the luxuries and conveniences of temporary life do diminish my independence.
The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life do prevent people from becoming strong individuals. For instance, I used to take the sky train to work. I also walk from my workplace to the train station. As a result, I walk at least 10,000 steps per day. However, after the Covid-19, I travel by car. Traveling by car makes my life more convenient because it takes less time for commuting. The result from traveling by car is that I rarely walk. My daily steps are at best 3,000 steps. The first thing that I noticed is that I gained a lot of weight even though I consume similar calories intake. I also get tired easily when walking up the stairs. This means that my physical health is diminished. I also become weaker. As a result, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent me from becoming a strong individual.
However, the statement might not hold true. Although traveling by car can worsen my health, there are some luxuries and conveniences that help me regain my health. To illustrate, my father bought me an elliptical machine and dumbbells. The elliptical machine can be used as a substitute for walking to work while dumbbells are for weight training. I also enjoy exercising in my house because it is very convenient. This allows me to lose weight and gain my strength from weight training. Therefore, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life make me become a stronger person.
The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life also make people independent. For instance, an elevator for a two-story house may be considered as luxury, but it becomes necessary if people in the house got injured and could not walk. This means that people are not necessarily weak because they rely on the elevator when they get injured or could not walk. Thus, in this manner, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life do not prevent individuals from becoming independent.
In conclusion, I agree with the statement that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life may prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. However, there are some circumstances that might not be true.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'working'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: working
... instance, I used to take the sky train to work. I also walk from my workplace to the t...
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Line 7, column 584, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'calories'' or 'calorie's', 'calory's'?
Suggestion: calories'; calorie's; calory's
...of weight even though I consume similar calories intake. I also get tired easily when wa...
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Line 7, column 835, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t me from becoming a strong individual. However, the statement might not hold tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 33.0505617978 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2844.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 564.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04255319149 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87326216964 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98815629012 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404255319149 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 6.24550561798 400% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.2370786517 198% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6110356146 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.1 118.986275619 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.1 23.4991977007 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.575 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.83258426966 310% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224355074221 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708118413658 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107682315017 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161897487275 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104745526497 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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