A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
A nation's greatness is dependent on how it helps its citizens fulfill their life dreams, and the role that education plays to this end cannot be understated. Moreover, the issue of whether or not a nation should compel its citizens to follow the same curriculum till they enter college is hotly contested, as mentioned in the prompt. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the aforementioned statement for two reasons.
The enforcement of a uniform curriculum on all students in a country can be especially detrimental in countries with high diversity like India, as it might cause a disparity in representation for various cultures. Students belonging to different states and ethnic groups, along with learning the basic information every person needs to know, should also be aware of the uniqueness of their own cultures. In today's fast-paced world, with parents struggling to give time to their children, there is a great risk of children not inheriting the cultural riches of their ancestors. To this end, a unified curriculum might not be the most feasible option for disseminating these cultural traditions, and a set of diverse curriculums each specifically catering to different groups might be a better way out.
Moreover, giving the power to choose what a country's next generation knows about its glorious history in the hands of a few people makes the curriculum susceptible to harmful biases. This might cause a misrepresentation of the country's past in the minds of its students and can be exploited for spreading hate and intolerance against minority groups. For instance, North Korea's education has largely been focused on portarying its Supreme Leader as a divine being, and cutting the people off from the rest of the world so as to prevent dissent. Can we allow something like this to happen to our children by letting them study a curriculum susceptible to bias from people for their vested interests?
It can be argued that a unified curriculum allows uniformity and ensures that students are on the same page while starting college. But, what if this unified curriculum jusitified discrimination against underrepresented groups? This would imply that every young mind of the country would be polluted with the same hate, which is completely unjustifiable. Hence, in my opinion, it would be better for countries to allow the existence of multiple curriculums in order to allow better dissemination of cultural knowledge and prevent its future citizens from getting brainwashed into turning against each other.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 3, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
A nations greatness is dependent on how it helps ...
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Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... be understated. Moreover, the issue of whether or not a nation should compel its citizens to ...
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Line 5, column 520, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e people off from the rest of the world so as to prevent dissent. Can we allow something...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22549019608 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00176162554 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553921568627 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0664145227 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.133333333 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210143078486 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719095123302 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829414998745 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135058156737 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794225699113 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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