The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people s efficiency so that they have more leisure time Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t

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The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Advancement in technology is the root of the development of society. With the improvement and advancement of technology, the world would become a better place to live. The primary purpose of new technologies or improving existing technology is to ease the human workload. Technologies are used to either ease tedious processes or to provide us with amenities in our daily life.
Advancement of technologies should have a primary purpose to increase people’s efficiency and provide more leisure time. Developing a technology that does human work but takes the same amount of human engagement to use that technology would be of no use and would prove reluctant. For instance, in the production of edibles like chips, biscuits, cookies, and many more, the technologies used are automatic packing, automatic air-tight sealing, machines for manufacturing these edibles, and so on. These technologies are meant to reduce human work hours and provide them more leisure time for completing different activities, like in the above example activities related to marketing and advertising can be done at this time. Thus, it helps to improve the efficiency of production.
On the other hand, various new technologies are meant to be used as amenities for humans. These technologies do not improve the efficiency of people but are still used among large groups. Rather, these are used in leisure time. One example of such technology is Alexa bot, it helps human not increase efficiency but let them sit back and itself do the job. Such technologies are also useful as they provide enjoyment for humans. Another instance can be gaming industry, these technologies are also meant to be used in leisure time for enjoyment.
Thus, the primary goal of advancement should be to improve people’s efficiency but it should not be the only goal as after providing leisure time people should have something to rely on at this time. Hence, advancement in any field of technology would bolster this technology-driven world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be used in leisure time for enjoyment. Thus, the primary goal of advancement sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, still, thus, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 322.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22670807453 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98602282601 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468944099379 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.0161560542 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2903238569 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111451822402 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864522968257 0.0758088955206 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202061614406 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639974263468 0.0667264976115 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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