Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
The issue of children's behavior is depending on their society is a controversial one. One the one hand, some people think that violence in society can affect children's behavior, On the other hand some people think is children's behavior is totally depend on their peer groups and parental role models. However, in finale analysis, I believe that children's nature and behavior is totally depend on their peer groups and parental role models.
A main reason that children always live and stay together with their parents and friend and they always influenced by their environment. Children are like water they always adopt their nearby things. It is very important role of parent also to make a children an erudite. For example, In the Ramayana, Ram always stays with their parents, Parents are the first teacher in every-bodies life, they thought him all war strategies. He was the king on their kingdom but always surrounded by enemies and violence. But Ram's friends means his brothers always helpful to him.
Another reason for my view is that even if violence in society affects daily behavior by media. It shouldn't comes to children, Parents have to take care of these things. Every children follows their parents and sees them as a role model. For example, Children goes to school, play with their friend but they always has to listen good things only.
while there are arguments to be made both sides, it is clear that there are greater advantages by following parental role model even if media is violating an environment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
... think is childrens behavior is totally depend on their peer groups and parental role ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...hildrens nature and behavior is totally depend on their peer groups and parental role ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...y important role of parent also to make a children an erudite. For example, In the Ramayan...
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
... role of parent also to make a children an erudite. For example, In the Ramayana, Ram alwa...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ety affects daily behavior by media. It shouldnt comes to children, Parents have to take...
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Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...ents have to take care of these things. Every children follows their parents and sees...
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Message: You should probably use 'follow'.
Suggestion: follow
...ke care of these things. Every children follows their parents and sees them as a role m...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... play with their friend but they always has to listen good things only. while th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...ways has to listen good things only. while there are arguments to be made both sid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, as to, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 2235.4752809 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 257.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98054474708 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43824543536 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 215.323595506 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552529182879 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 704.065955056 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8280392737 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4285714286 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264957280507 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103086246699 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766595517725 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16197697932 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783436902313 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.