Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position
In Indian culture for sure famous or well achieved persons are always under the lime light of the people and have a direct influence on the society. When a person is in such a position of influence, he shold be completely aware of his position and act accordingly towards the development of scoiecty to the extent without disturbing their personal life. In general a common man or a fan of the star would like to imitate the lifestyle. This is where as a society we should understand that we cannot be another person. To an most extent I wish to support the issue in couple of points.
One of such incidents has also happend in the past, when there was a rumor spreading around soft drink that it was prepared with a pesticide. Immediately without a moment of hesitation the then Brand Ambassdor of the soft drink has immdiattely stopped endorsing it. If he had continued to support / endorse the brand IT would still have a better sales and image in market. The desicion made the people think twice before consuming that drink for a long time.
If the celebrities come forward in time of natural calimites in the need of hour it will strengthen their relationship with people with a strong emotional connect. There will always be a diffrence in the help that is obtained directly and indirectly.
At the end of day, the society made them as Stars or Celebrities even though they had talent if they don't act accordingly and have empathy towards society.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2023-08-26 | Ataraxia-m | 83 | view |
| 2023-08-26 | Ataraxia-m | 66 | view |
| 2023-08-10 | Saket Choudhary | 50 | view |
| 2023-07-11 | Technoblade | 66 | view |
| 2023-04-19 | keisham | 75 | view |
- Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility Write a response in wh 50
- Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility Write a response in wh 50
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In Indian culture for sure famous or well achieved persons are always und...
^^
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In Indian culture for sure famous or well achieved persons are always under t...
^^
Line 1, column 447, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
... like to imitate the lifestyle. This is where as a society we should understand that we ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 524, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nd that we cannot be another person. To an most extent I wish to support the issue...
^^
Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... incidents has also happend in the past, when there was a rumor spreading around ...
^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... spreading around soft drink that it was prepared with a pesticide. Immediately w...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nsuming that drink for a long time. If the celebrities come forward in time of...
^^
Line 7, column 31, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ctly. At the end of day, the society made them as Stars or Celebrities even t...
^^
Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ies even though they had talent if they dont act accordingly and have empathy toward...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, if, so, still, then, well, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1205.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 257.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68871595331 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62259931401 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591439688716 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 704.065955056 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0006775012 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.416666667 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12887800583 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428546139478 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434176378611 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723333535679 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471719407681 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In Indian culture for sure famous or well achieved persons are always und...
^^
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In Indian culture for sure famous or well achieved persons are always under t...
^^
Line 1, column 447, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
... like to imitate the lifestyle. This is where as a society we should understand that we ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 524, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nd that we cannot be another person. To an most extent I wish to support the issue...
^^
Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... incidents has also happend in the past, when there was a rumor spreading around ...
^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... spreading around soft drink that it was prepared with a pesticide. Immediately w...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nsuming that drink for a long time. If the celebrities come forward in time of...
^^
Line 7, column 31, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ctly. At the end of day, the society made them as Stars or Celebrities even t...
^^
Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ies even though they had talent if they dont act accordingly and have empathy toward...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, if, so, still, then, well, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1205.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 257.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68871595331 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62259931401 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591439688716 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 704.065955056 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0006775012 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.416666667 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12887800583 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428546139478 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434176378611 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723333535679 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471719407681 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.