Students should fund their education with part-time work that they do while they study.
According to my opinion, it depends on the financial status of a student and his parents to decide on whether to fund their education with part-time work. This decision is also contingent upon the nature of the course the student has adopted to pursue. We can delineate these points in detail as follows.
First of all, if the student is from a weak financial background, and has taken some loans for his study, it behooves him to find out a suitable part time work to earn and collect as much as he can to lower the tuition fees and living expenses burden from him as well as from his guardians. Although, there should be a good balance between the amount of time devoted for earning and the studies. Giving more emphasis to either of the tasks can produce severe consequences like if assignments, tuition classes and practices are compromised in order to earn more, that can result in bad scores or even failing the exams, eliciting stress and depression which is contrary to what was the purpose of working and funding the education - a relaxed mind to study better.
The second point to consider is the nature of the course being enrolled in. If it is exacting and include abstruse subjects entailing arduous efforts and protracted undisturbed sessions of rigorous reading, practicing, then it is better to have full pecuniary support from your guardians, or bank loans or other possible sources and envisage the possibility of repaying only after completing the course and having started our professional career. This will be a safer path to follow not impacting our efficacy on the learning and thereby coming to fruition in the long run.
Despite these two main factors, some will argue that no matter how hard the subjects are, or how solvent a student is from his background, he must take out some time for earning at least a bit, because it will build upon his experience and make him an all round personality.
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 50
- Technology and the human activity that goes with it inevitably leads to greater pollution and environmental damage 37
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 33
- Students should fund their education with part time work that they do while they study 40
- To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... it behooves him to find out a suitable part time work to earn and collect as much as he ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, then, well, at least, in fact, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 333.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8048048048 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56639748873 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612612612613 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.086864029 60.3974514979 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.0 118.986275619 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3 23.4991977007 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16443361031 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063175379874 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896719263309 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1016243433 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909761841189 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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