The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Town A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.
Here we are presented with pie charts that clearly depict the proportion of labor force in three sectors of town A and town B in two different years (1960 and 2010).
As a general starting point, the percentage of workers in the manufacturing sector of town A escalated significantly in the course of 50 years. Meanwhile, the percentage of salespersons in the labor force of town B dropped remarkably after haft of the decade.
When it comes to town A, it is obvious that the workforce in the manufacturing sector became dominant among three sectors with a considerable uplift of 35% from 29% in 1950 to 64% in 2010. In a contrasting manner, the proportion of salesmen and saleswomen tumbled dramatically of 21% from 41% down to 20%. In a similar fashion, the percentage of workers in the services sector also diminished from 30% down to almost half of that proportion (16%).
Moving on to town B, the most significant alteration is for the sales field with an overwhelming reduction of approximately 20%. Meanwhile, employees in the manufacturing sector accounted for 15% more in the total working population from 10% to 25% in 1950 and 2010 respectively. As a final note, the proportion of labor in the services area appeared constant with just a slight growth from 20% to 22% over 50 years.
- The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010 61
- Students should pay the full cost for their own study because university education benefits individuals rather than society To what extent do you agree or disagree 84
- Some people argue that we should do research into our family history Others agree with the view that we should focus on the present and future Discuss both views and give your own opinion 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "In a contrasting manner" with adverb for "contrasting"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...of 35% from 29% in 1950 to 64% in 2010. In a contrasting manner, the proportion of salesmen and saleswo...
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...amatically of 21% from 41% down to 20%. In a similar fashion, the percentage of workers in the servi...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...shion, the percentage of workers in the services sector also diminished from 30% down to...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...al note, the proportion of labor in the services area appeared constant with just a slig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1076.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 223.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82511210762 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02555359265 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533632286996 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.7766439614 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.555555556 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.11111111111 5.23603664747 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289382285107 0.215688989381 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112152881061 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111876846365 0.0843802449381 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191855074633 0.15604864568 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119943497787 0.0819641961636 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.