The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.

The figure illustrates the process to make chocolate and compares the contribution factors to the price of a chocolate bar.

It is clear that, chocolate bar and cocoa powders are two final products, which are obtained from chocolate product processing. Moreover, the percentage in the cost of ingredient and overhead is the highest, whereas, the figure for that of farmer is the lowest.

It can be seen from the diagrams that, in the first step, cocoa is grinned via grinder to remove waste to get cocoa liquor. In the second step, cocoa liquor is pressed to get the cocoa butter and cocoa powders. cocoa powder from the second step is used for industry, while cocoa butter is mixed with cocoa liquor, sugars and other ingredients in the final step to create chocolate bar.

It is showed in the bar chart that the price of bar chocolate can be divided into four components, in which the percentages of in the cost of ingredient and overhead is highest at 37%, while farmers obtain only 4% in the proportion of chocolate bar price. Supermarket profit, tax and company income contribute to 34%, 15% and 10% in the percentage of the chocolate bar price, respectively.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 213, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cocoa
...get the cocoa butter and cocoa powders. cocoa powder from the second step is used for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, moreover, second, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88059701493 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62248994819 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497512437811 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4308707489 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.625 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226995905761 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116494061084 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104851797783 0.0843802449381 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178016197929 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100585128815 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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