The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The two pictures compare the previous layout of the school in 2004 and some proposed building work for that site in 2024.
We can see that there will be some changes to almost areas of the building. In additon, the school is able to recieved a larger number of stundents involving in.
It is clear that the main path connecting the entrance to the sports court will be separated to build a new area, circulating between school building 1 and the second one . A new road will be installed in the eastsouthern direction to the main entrance, which will be replaced for the old path. The parking lot is planned to be spanned into two areas connecting to the the main road, namely car park 1 and car park 2.
Accoridng to the building proposal, there will be an installation of a school building 3 to recruite more students, which is intended to serve for around 400 new units. The sports field, which was demolish to build the car park 2 and the new studying area, will be hauled to the southerly direction of the building. It is noticeable that the sports field will be widened to displace less space for other changes.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to the sports court will be separated to build a new area, circulating between sc...
^^
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...een school building 1 and the second one . A new road will be installed in the eas...
^^
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...be spanned into two areas connecting to the the main road, namely car park 1 and car pa...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...be spanned into two areas connecting to the the main road, namely car park 1 and car pa...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 197, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'demolished'.
Suggestion: demolished
... new units. The sports field, which was demolish to build the car park 2 and the new stu...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 919.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52709359606 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50172470304 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5576411922 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.111111111 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.11111111111 5.23603664747 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158556069863 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776327542996 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905519149864 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135010454391 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108425800291 0.0819641961636 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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