The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releva

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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagrams illustrate the process of cement production and how concrete is produced. It can be clearly seen that the cement production comprises from four stages. While the producing of concrete consists of two stages.
According to the first diagram which explains the stages of cement’s formation. In the first stage, the clay is mixed with limestone to produce the powder by the crusher. After that, the powder exposes to the heat inside rotating heater to turn into the grinder. In the last stage, the grinder forms a cement which transfers to bags.
When it comes to the second diagram which gives information about the production of concrete. In the first stage, the water(10%), cement(15%), sand(25%), and gravel(5%) are mixed into the concrete mixer to produce small stones.
To sum up, it is worth to note the cement consider the input for forming small stones.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... production comprises from four stages. While the producing of concrete consists of t...
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Line 2, column 339, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...forms a cement which transfers to bags. When it comes to the second diagram which gi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 735.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 146.0 196.424390244 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03424657534 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5224177847 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582191780822 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.1700320326 43.030603864 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.5 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218565622782 0.215688989381 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887339368295 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548933936821 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123542494427 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363119578026 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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