The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
A glance at the line charts provided reveals how much money British parents spent on their children’s sporting activities and the quantity of British children who engaged in football, swimming, athletics, over a six-year period of time, from 2008 to 2014.
It is noticeable from the two charts is that British parents spent more money on their children’s sports each year and British children always took part in football the most while compared to other sports.
If we look at the first chart, it saw a marked increase in each two year. In 2014 it got a peak at 33 pounds.
As for the second chart, it also saw a rise in three different sports. For football, it fluctuated from 2008 to 2010 at 8 pounds and then peaked at 9 pounds in 2014, which meant that it accounted for the highest number of children attending. Regarding athletics, it also stabilized at around one pounds at the same period of time and then experienced a dramatic growth from 2010 to 2012 and finally slightly decrease to nearly five pounds, overtaking swimming to become the second after football. With respect to swimming, it rose gradually from two pounds to just under four pounds, which meant that it had the lowest quantity of British’s children participate in.
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- Some people think the fittest and strongest individuals and team will win in sports while others believe it is those who have a good mental attitude will win in the end Discuss both views and give your own opinion 56
- The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children s sports between 2008 and 2014 The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period 84
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Thanks for checking my IELTS writing task 1 essay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...l, swimming, athletics, over a six-year period of time, from 2008 to 2014. It is noticeable...
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Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ilized at around one pounds at the same period of time and then experienced a dramatic growth ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, then, while, as for, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1043.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8511627907 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58812865819 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572093023256 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.3943405968 43.030603864 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.375 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 22.9334400587 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.375 5.23603664747 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341668363752 0.215688989381 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145549418825 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119860101185 0.0843802449381 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229206332784 0.15604864568 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122518526268 0.0819641961636 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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