The graph below shows how much time schoolchildren aged 10-11 years old spend in a week for different home activities

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The graph below shows how much time schoolchildren aged 10-11 years old spend in a week for different home activities

The line graph provides information about the weekly hours of 10-11- years old schoolchildren's home activity between 2000 and the present.

Generally,spending time on TV and computer has changed in a contradictory way. During the given 8-year period the figures for TV has decreased moderately,wherease computer using has experienced an upward trend since 2000.

Looking at the details we can see that TV was on the highest level in 2000 with numbers showing more than 20 hours and it continued maintaining the same level till 2003.Before showing some fluctuations around 14-16 hours during 4 years,it dropped gently from 21 to 15 hours.

According to the details for computer,the numbers demonstrated positive figures,after showing slightly increase about 4 hours in 2000 and 2001,it continued to go up noticeably from 6 to 16 in different years,2002,2003,2004.Since then it has been maintaining a rise showing the highest point at 21 hours.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a contradictory way" with adverb for "contradictory"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ing time on TV and computer has changed in a contradictory way. During the given 8-year period the fig...
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...he numbers demonstrated positive figures,after showing slightly increase about 4 hours...
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... showing slightly increase about 4 hours in 2000 and 2001,it continued to go up n...
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...to 16 in different years,2002,2003,2004.Since then it has been maintaining a rise sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 148.0 196.424390244 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47297297297 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48791127476 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.71422551103 2.65546596893 140% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668918918919 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.677332677 43.030603864 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.0 112.824112599 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 22.9334400587 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.23603664747 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210276634945 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123448523389 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114502598086 0.0843802449381 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140146062798 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122662064592 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.2329268293 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 11.4140731707 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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