The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The given line graph provides a comparison of the shop closures and the start-up businesses in one nation over a seven-year period.
From an overall perspective, it is highlighted that both models witnessed a fluctuated pattern over the years shown.
According to data on the diagram, it is conspicuous that the number of new shops was more than 2000 stores when compared with the closed shops in 2011. Subsequently, the volume of shop closures reached a peak in 2013 while the others were in the next year after that. However, from 2014 to 2015, both categories experienced a dramatic downward trend. In this period, the number of new stores was roughly higher than 3 times when compared with closed shops. Consequently, at the end of the period, shop closures are more than 2000 stores as the others.
Noticeably, it is evident that both types of businesses met the same record in 2014, with the number of around 6000 shops. Following that, the new brand stores were down by 2000 stores while the shop closures decreased by 6000 stores. In spite of the varied pattern, the number of opening and closing stores stood at 3000 and 5000 shops respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, so, while, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85858585859 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58926937303 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.0044438959 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.2 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283547923631 0.215688989381 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112550938343 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938292329161 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145909405025 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0925587207498 0.0819641961636 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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