IELTS Writing Task 1: The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009.
The table indicates the amount of money secondary / high school teachers received in 2009.
Generally, it can be seen that Lexumbourg government provided the highest payment for teachers at the beginning. On the contrary, Australian lecturers earned the lowest income when they first taught in schools.
Even though Denmark lecturers earned much money than Australian teachers at the first period of their teaching path, their wages after 15 years at work seemed to be the same with the maximum amount they could get, for about 48000 and 54000 perspectively, so they spent the least time to reach the max salary, from 8 to 9 years.
There was a slight rise, about 18000, in income after 15 years as a Korean teacher. They spent the second longest time- 34 years, to get maximum earnings of 62 000.
The payment that was received by Japanese and Luxembourge lecturers increased remarkably, nearly 30000 after 15 years. It took them more than 30 years to reach the maximum salary. This could be seen rising slightly, compared with the after 15-year income.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...embourge lecturers increased remarkably, nearly 30000 after 15 years. It took the...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 889.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02259887006 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45106764687 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638418079096 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 76.5832073912 43.030603864 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7777777778 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0929907193795 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544126786066 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116782079357 0.0843802449381 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927419833788 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144512958593 0.0819641961636 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...embourge lecturers increased remarkably, nearly 30000 after 15 years. It took the...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 889.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02259887006 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45106764687 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638418079096 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 76.5832073912 43.030603864 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7777777778 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0929907193795 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544126786066 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116782079357 0.0843802449381 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927419833788 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144512958593 0.0819641961636 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.