A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company.
In your letter:
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to give my feedback about your decision to sponsor the local children’s sports team or pay for two open –air concerts.
In my opinion, sponsoring the children’s sports for two years will be better idea with various benefits. Children will get an opportunity to expose their talent and this will in turn give a chance to play for national level and further they will be recognized.
The open air concerts, is a great idea where live concerts would make people feel pleasure and as we say music is divine so, healthy music gives energy and good thoughts.
Having said, both the ideas are great and from my point of view I feel that you may spend the money equally on both the proposals by dividing one year for sports and one year for live concerts so, that everyone will have an opportunity to explore the talent.

Yours faithfully,
Kalyani.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to give my feed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, so, i feel, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 32.9175257732 46% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 26.3917525773 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 747.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 156.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78846153846 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5402738933 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.679487179487 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 290.88556701 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.5015987026 44.8134815571 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5 76.5299724578 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 16.8248392259 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303906561163 0.216113520407 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154364643655 0.0766984524023 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130658519463 0.0603063233224 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195696986272 0.12726935374 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147923750966 0.0580467560999 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 8.37731958763 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 70.7449484536 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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