You are attending a night course in the school You are not happy with some parts of the course Write a letter to the school director about this In your letter you should say which course you are studying what things you are not happy about what you expect

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You are attending a night course in the school. You are not happy with some parts of the course. Write a letter to the school director about this.
In your letter, you should say:
-which course you are studying
-what things you are not happy about
-what you expect the school director to do

Dear Sir/Madam,

Dear Sir,

I hope you will find this letter in the best of health and happiness. I'm writing to share detailed feedback on the newly launched night course which is organized by your prestigious institution.

The name of the course is Data Modelling which generally teaches about showcasing the data in different types of views, graphs, and other images. It helps us to understand the data which is important for database professionals such as analysts and scientists while they are studying the data to find insights that incline the growth of database professionals.

However, some of the contents such as python data visualization, R data graphs, and Weka tool have not been covered in the data modeling course. The curriculum sticks to the Microsoft excel tool which is an outdated technology in today's technological industry practices. Therefore, I urge you to please reform your data modeling syllabus and add the latest contents which are been practiced in the industry.

If you feel like getting suggestions about reforming the course content, I would suggest fixing a meeting with some database professionals from top-notch firms will help you to provide detailed information on adding the course contents.

I am hoping that you will consider taking my suggestion to make this newly launched course a worth one.

Yours faithfully,
Shwatank Bhasin

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1158.0 937.175257732 124% => OK
No of words: 218.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3119266055 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85960521306 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623853211009 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3282025734 44.8134815571 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.8 76.5299724578 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280982354521 0.216113520407 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106989144081 0.0766984524023 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084757055008 0.0603063233224 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170915382506 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853643877637 0.0580467560999 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 8.37731958763 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 70.7449484536 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 8.71597938144 155% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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