You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.Explain why you took the jobDescribe the problem you experiencedsuggest what could be done about them.

Essay topics:

You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.

Explain why you took the job

Describe the problem you experienced

suggest what could be done about them.

Dear Sir,

I am david, working as receptionist in your esteemed company. I have been newly appointed as receptionist as part time worker. it's almost 6 weeks since my appointment and I would like to bring it your notice about some problems that I am facing in my work. As a student I am allowed to work only 20 hours a week as per my Visa. When I joined, the contract was for 4 hours per day from 6 to 10.15 PM (15 minutes break time) 5 days in a week i.e from Monday to Friday. pay scale was fixed as 15 pounds per hour and no wages for break or holiday. Recently I checked my bank account and I was surprised to find that may wages are not sufficiently paid as promised in the contract. Hence, I requested HR department for my pay slip and I found that I have been paid only 10 pounds per hour instead of 15 as promised in contract.

Kindly, address this issue immediately, as you know as a student my only income source is this job. Another issue which worries me is often team is asking me to work for extra time whenever there is late arrival of next employee. I find it difficult to manage this extra work as it's night 10.15PM and it is difficult to get a bus for my home. I hope you take immediate action to sort these issues.

Thanking you,

david.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am david, working as receptionist in y...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...been newly appointed as receptionist as part time worker. its almost 6 weeks since my app...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Its
...ed as receptionist as part time worker. its almost 6 weeks since my appointment and...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ed as receptionist as part time worker. its almost 6 weeks since my appointment and...
^^^
Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s for 4 hours per day from 6 to 10.15 PM 15 minutes break time 5 days in a week i...
^^
Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Pay
...ys in a week i.e from Monday to Friday. pay scale was fixed as 15 pounds per hour a...
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Line 15, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ort these issues. Thanking you, david.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, so, as for, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1033.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 244.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23360655738 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41436231561 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577868852459 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 312.3 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5586179222 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4615384615 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152704455197 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061706112282 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505169217435 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108079026469 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331937937094 0.0580467560999 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 8.37731958763 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 8.71597938144 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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