You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have compl

Essay topics:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.

Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter

explain why you are writing
describe your circumstances
ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course
You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to register the desirable computer program which I have been waiting for. It was my dream to get professional knowledge of computer.

As the advertisement mentioned, the program is only suitable for pre-educated people about computer. However, I have learned about computer on my own, since I was 12 years old. Frankly, I am quiet good at some skills; video editing, reading computer words and searching high quality information.

So, if you allow me an opportunity to enroll, I will catch up everything perfectly. Even though, the ads was written about tiny condition of limitation to enter, it will be worth experience in my future. If it is impossible, could you please let me know other programs I can do?

I will terribly appreciate all your assistance this matter.

Best regards,

MJ

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assistance this matter. Best regards, MJ
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
frankly, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 711.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 139.0 206.0 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11510791367 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43363162301 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95717584545 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.748201438849 0.622605031667 120% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 290.88556701 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4566905622 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.1 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 4.34317383033 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215206813085 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656760037662 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518878736924 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103876118606 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048878398116 0.0580467560999 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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