You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.
Which viewpoint do you agree with?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
It is undeniable that there are many benefits when people watch many kind of advertisements. First of all, some good items can make our lives better.
For instance, women had to do the laundry with their hands in the past. Also, it took a longer time and caused physical burden. However, As improving technology, new laundry machine was invented and the company which made the machine advertised people to buy this one. As a result, most of women finally could feel free of household and it became a first step to enter the economic society. Secondly, some public advertisement can help people. For example, there was a flood in Indonesia. so government alarmed people to collect money. it make a success.
Nevertheless, in my opinion, I believed that there are more disadvantages for commercial advertisements. It is clear that it is impact on people instinct in a negative way. For illustrate, I have some experiences that I bought something even though I did not need it. When I was waiting for my friend, I decided to just browse in department store. However, I saw the advertise of a lady’s clothing store which posted grand sale and I bought a dress in the store which I did not need at all. this phenomenon can affect as younger as people are. Moreover, advertisements for commercial does not always show the truth. According to BBC, 500 companies broke the advertisement laws with over advertisements last year.
In conclusion, it is true that an advertisement is essential for us in modern society. I suggest that we have to distinguish what we really need or not and companies should aware of themselves how much impact they have and tell the only truth with their advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
...ere are many benefits when people watch many kind of advertisements. First of all, some g...
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Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the women') or simply say ''most women''.
Suggestion: most of the women; most women
...ed people to buy this one. As a result, most of women finally could feel free of household an...
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Line 2, column 489, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...xample, there was a flood in Indonesia. so government alarmed people to collect mo...
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Line 2, column 536, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...rnment alarmed people to collect money. it make a success. Nevertheless, in my ...
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Line 2, column 539, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ent alarmed people to collect money. it make a success. Nevertheless, in my opini...
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Line 4, column 155, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ar that it is impact on people instinct in a negative way. For illustrate, I have some experience...
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Line 4, column 364, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...wse in department store. However, I saw the advertise of a lady's clothing store which p...
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Line 4, column 497, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... the store which I did not need at all. this phenomenon can affect as younger as peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, moreover, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86896551724 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96883535299 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589655172414 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9337899517 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.6 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155380443938 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394416162097 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385522372468 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897591552064 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379155754246 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.