In the 21st century, contact between many different parts of the world has developed rapidly through air travel and telecommunications. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
We are living in the twenty-first century, the era of technological breakthrough. Two aspects that have significantly influenced on bridging the gaps among people are travelling by air and the telecommunication industry. While there are several detrimental effects on the aforementioned fields, I firmly hold the view that the benefits of this development are more significant.
On the one hand, some individuals approve that air travelling and commuting by phones, Internet and the same means may be a trigger for a plethora of social issues. One of the negative repercussions of this trend is the possibility of global warming caused by the excessive number of international flights. The experience is that most airplanes run on fossil fuels, which contain a myriad of deleterious substances, including CO2. This is considered to result in the rise in overall temperature worldwide. Hence, the more flights are taken, the higher the pace of global warming will be. With regard to the modern media of communication, the swindles on the Internet are likely to be attributable to the dramatic development of technology. To exemplify, a short film produced by Netflix named “Tinder swindlers” illustrates how Internet users be victimized in the credit cards and money fraud conducted by international cyber criminals. Once these incidents happen, not only do the victims suffer from financial loss but also a sense of resentment. The situation is even worse when hackers try to steal top-secret national information, which puts the relationships between countries at risk of crumbling. In other words, both individuals and the government can face up with the final outcomes.
On the other hand, I am in favor of the idea that the demerits of travelling by planes and telecommunication are eclipsed by the merits of technical advance for the civilization. Firstly, airline companies can offer a country with the boost of domestic and international tourism. As a matter of fact, before the advent of aircrafts, it posed a huge challenge to mankind, including potential risks and human labors. Nevertheless, with the availability of the fastest mode of transport, people can fly to any destination within a few hours. As a result, the more international trips are made, the more profit gained for tourism industry. When it comes to the groundbreaking advancement of telecommunication, one of the most advantageous aspects might be in the field of education. In fact, telecommunications can provide students whose desire is international education with opportunities to take an online course from the university overseas without leaving their home country. Take an example of Vietnamese students, a majority of them now can pursue a variety of degrees produced by prestigious universities from abroad thanks to the convenience of e-learning, which is an utmost important invention in telecommunication industry.
To sum up, it is undeniable that there are two schools of thought about how travelling by air and telecommunications affect the way we live our ordinary life. From my perspective, what we might lose due to this trend pales in comparison to what we have achieved and will continue to in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, to sum up, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 41.998997996 210% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2705.0 1615.20841683 167% => OK
No of words: 509.0 315.596192385 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31434184676 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40305220603 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 176.041082164 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565815324165 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 865.8 506.74238477 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6091836707 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.608695652 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1304347826 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4347826087 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115089843389 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286633535856 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302450227051 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742114284809 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228676179541 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 78.4519038076 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in other words, to sum up, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 41.998997996 210% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2705.0 1615.20841683 167% => OK
No of words: 509.0 315.596192385 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31434184676 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.40305220603 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 176.041082164 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565815324165 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 865.8 506.74238477 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6091836707 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.608695652 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1304347826 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4347826087 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115089843389 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286633535856 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302450227051 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0742114284809 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228676179541 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 78.4519038076 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.