Some people believe the purpose of education should be to help the individual to become useful to the society, while others believe it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
People hold different views about what education should help students in the future. While some individuals argue that the utmost important quest for education is to assist people to become productive to the society, I wholeheartedly believe that helping learners to turn their dreams into reality is also a crucial mission.
On one hand, schools need to educate students to be community-minded people. In fact, after graduation, they are expected to join the labor force and start to make contribution to the national economy. Therefore, learners should be equipped with knowledge and skills of particular fields of their chosen occupations. For instance, we are living in digital era, so integrating computer science lessons to the curriculum helps students prepare for their work as IT engineers or programmers. Without educational support from schools, pupils will probably not be knowledgeable about the jobs they decide to take, which results in the low-quality workforce as well as the negative impact on the development of the country.
On the other hand, I strongly hold the view that education providers should assist learners to realize their ambitions. In my opinion, most students’ target is to have successful careers in the future. When individuals have steady progress in their life, they are more likely to contribute to the society. In other words, managing to pursue their ambitions means more productive citizens are made. In contrast, if education institutions do not support school boys and girls with their dreams, more students can experience a sense of demotivation that leads to the loss on society level and the future society will have less useful individuals.
In conclusion, the two important responsibilities for educational system, including preparing students to be productive to society and planning an ambition for them, play separate but complementary roles.
- Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species for example the tiger or the blue whale To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement 67
- Nowadays there is a growing trend of private car ownership Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages or environmental problems associated with this 84
- There is too much noise in many public places in cities What are the causes of this problem What can be done to solve the problem 73
- Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it Other think students should spend time on more important subjects Discuss both views and give your opinion 89
- Since travelling abroad became relatively inexpensive more countries opened their doors for foreign tourists Is it a positive or negative trend Give your opinion and include relevant examples 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44745762712 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01627111025 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613559322034 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3719863623 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.615384615 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288111463771 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091410802963 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655967713582 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169274824127 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939561918731 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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