Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business.
Why do you think that is?
What could be done to encourage people to take interest in art?
It is undoubtedly the case that art plays a vital role in society. However,in recent years, there has been a growing focus towards science, technology and business. While there are some causes to this issue, I believe that societies can take steps to alter this situation.
There are many reasons that draw people’s attentions toward science, technology and business. First and foremost, technology has given us an incredible source of knowledge. Hardly can the society survive without the help and contribution of the electronic devices. Moreover, it is widely believed that science, technology and business are providing people with high salary jobs. From these reasons, many of them are altering their perspectives and are motivated by the occupations that can fulfill their needs and provide them a wealthy life. For instance, computer engineering or researchers have an average payment of approximately 10 to 20 thousand dollars a month, which scarcely can be earned by artists.
However, there are some steps that communities and government could consider to encourage and promote artworks. Firstly, schools should teach and let students to study art in order to enhance their knowledge about the culture and can nurture their natural artistic skills. This will help children learn how to express their emotion and feeling through art-work. More than that, government should support artists and maintain the attentiveness of society towards art field. For example, art work can be promoted through social media or that the government should organize more contests to increase people’s interests.
To conclude, although some peolple altered their focus to science, technology and business rather than art, there are still ways to maintain the importance of art.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45818181818 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71250791216 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614545454545 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7443973155 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.066666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213388690824 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682819056611 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410619226525 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127548094807 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425916316373 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.