The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, there is an ongoing debate about whether in years to come, human's health would be lower in comparison to that in the current time. While I acknowledge that numerous future factors might exert some ominous influences on the standard of people's health, I would advocate that future technology and innovations play such a crucial role in helping individuals to have a healthy life.
On the one hand, it is indisputable that in years to come, people's health can be exacerbated by some factors. Firstly, owing to the rapid development of robotic engineer, individuals are prone to rely on robots, which enables them to pursue a sedentary lifestyle. This can be perfectly exemplified by the fact that should humans prefer to use robots to consummate arduous household tasks like cleaning or tidying up, they would gradually become lazy. Consequently, they are more likely to be vulnerable to potential diseases such as obesity or hypertension. Furthermore, in the future, more and more individuals will be occupied with a great amount of workload, which may put an enormous pressure on them. This is because that in years to come, in order to accelerate the economy and become prosperous, a great number nations encourage their inhabitants to work more. Accordingly, employees will be incapable of allocating their time for recreational activities, which is a determinant causing stress and depression among them.
On the other hand, there are a host of justifications prevailing me on conceding that in the future, human's health could be enhanced. The first reason is that with the assistance of technology, more modern healthcare treatments will be introduced. For instance, researchers in the US are devoting their endeavors to figure out the best treatment for tuberculosis disease. Hence, if patients are able to approach to these novel methods, their illnesses would be cured. Moreover, in the future, many nations are projected to be wealthy, which allows the authorities to allocate their budgets to improve healthcare systems and erect more hospitals. To illustrate, Vietnamese government has planned to construct more medical centers specializing in cancers in 2030 so as to meet the demands of patients. As a result, more lives could be rescued from this lethal disease.
In conclusion, explicitly, it cannot be denied that in the future civilisation, people's health might be affected detrimentally by some factors; nevertheless, I want to affirm future innovations would ensure that individuals would enjoy a healthy life.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
...g them. On the other hand, there are a host of justifications prevailing me on conc...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...centers specializing in cancers in 2030 so as to meet the demands of patients. As a resu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31265508685 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03554179249 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560794044665 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2742129609 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.941176471 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7058823529 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7058823529 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186288475314 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595271037216 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417045529218 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124015017098 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256950225082 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'hosts'?
Suggestion: hosts
...g them. On the other hand, there are a host of justifications prevailing me on conc...
^^^^
Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...centers specializing in cancers in 2030 so as to meet the demands of patients. As a resu...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31265508685 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03554179249 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560794044665 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2742129609 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.941176471 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7058823529 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7058823529 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186288475314 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595271037216 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417045529218 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124015017098 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256950225082 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.