Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree?
For the time being, in this unstoppable growing era, modern technology has made progress so strongly that electronic devices, especially computers are leading to the existence of various problems. It is supposed that young generation are being too dependent on online entertainment, and they should be persuaded into playing sports and participating in traditional past times rather than spending all day indoor playing games. From my perspectives, I completely agree with this statement and the reasons will be carefully analyzed in these following paragraphs.
To commence with, there is no denying that sports activities play a crucial role in the physical and mental development of a child. Since sitting in front of the computer screen for hours brings about the lack of movement, obesity and rays emitting from electronic devices do harm to the children’s eyes and vision, their health is baffled with these sorts of electronic entertainment. It is proven that taking part in outdoor activities help the youth to develop their stamina and build their muscles, especially with the teenagers who are in adolescence. Moreover, multiple surveys have shown that those who play active sports are more energetic and have abilities to deal with stress and pressure by themselves. Therefore, it is obvious that sporting outside contributes to boost both physical and mental health.
Secondly, taking up real fun and games enhance a child’s knowledge and practical experience. As cutting down on the great amount of time wasted on online entertainment offers adolescent opportunities to sit for interests outside, they will be acquired face-to-face interaction, problem-solving and social skills which are needed for their real life. As a consequence, the youth not only have chances to exchange their knowledge with others but also acquaint their full potentials. Additionally, in this modern age nowadays, traditional games are fading away gradually, and that young generations take actions to preserve traditional and customary past times is such a significant duty.
All in all, according to aforementioned sides, it can be concluded that online entertainment devices are easy to access to but they still may cause risk for children, thus, adolescence had better get involved in outdoor sports in order to improve both their health and understandings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47945205479 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04496360244 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619178082192 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0589454043 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.846153846 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0769230769 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290088977749 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847052822869 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765839776467 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164023590742 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704178000844 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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