The growing number of overweight people is putting strain on health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is obvious in today's modern world that obesity has become an additional burden on health care practices despite of other major health illnesses people are facing. In addition, excess amount of body fat is an aggravating factor for many other negative health outcomes in an individual’s life. However, some people believe that introducing exercises at school level promotes insight among younger generations to reduce bad cholesterol in the body and this essay is in favour of the argument.
Health care organisations across the globe spend vast amount of money to deal with varied health conditions that are chronic as well as acute. The number of admissions from patients suffering with overweight, however, has been drastically increased during last decade which has become a pressing problem for public and private hospitals in allocating beds in the wards. It is revealed in the survey conducted by Western Sydney University medical research group that, even though the number of long term health issues are more in individuals who are obese, management had to spend huge amount of money in expanding space to accommodate these people.
In the wake of argument listed, there is a positive instinct to increase awareness about the physical exercises in schools, so that children will know about the future health related problems of heavy weight. Keeping body active through various muscular movements not only keeps an individual fit to look, but also relaxes mind and limits people from eating junk food. For instance, managing director Dr Kim from 24 hour fitness centre said that children who are actively participating in their gym activities prefers to eat healthy food rather than consuming burgers and pizzas which is helping to keep themselves fit and healthy.
To conclude, even though greater Body Mass Index (BMI) is an ongoing physical illness, controlling it with physical exercises is beneficial to a person and creates sense of significance by reducing load on health care system
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: HEAVY_WEIGHT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'heavyweight'?
Suggestion: heavyweight
...t the future health related problems of heavy weight. Keeping body active through various mu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'centre' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centres'.
Suggestion: centres
...ng director Dr Kim from 24 hour fitness centre said that children who are actively par...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, for instance, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.246105919 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66300298593 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654205607477 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.2428830619 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.4 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274854226539 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998070938048 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573483441147 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152677388105 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549420571991 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.49 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: HEAVY_WEIGHT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'heavyweight'?
Suggestion: heavyweight
...t the future health related problems of heavy weight. Keeping body active through various mu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'centre' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centres'.
Suggestion: centres
...ng director Dr Kim from 24 hour fitness centre said that children who are actively par...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, for instance, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.246105919 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66300298593 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654205607477 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.2428830619 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.4 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274854226539 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998070938048 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573483441147 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152677388105 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549420571991 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.49 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.