The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there’s an increasing level of obesity, which has put an immense pressure on the healthcare system. Therefore, several individuals suggest that more physical activities should be integrated into a student’s education program at school. Personally, I completely agree with this idea since it helps reduce obesity among the public.
On the one hand, a healthy lifestyle involves various factors, including implementing sports for children at the very early stages of life. Since achieving a fit body requires quite a long process and a person’s perseverance in practicing every day, this idea could support the youngsters to be prevented from the risk of gaining weight. In addition, with the rapid development of modern society, people these days tend to use junk food and sugary-food more often than before. Parents don’t have much time for strict control with the type of food their children eat, hence this would potentially lead to obesity among the children in the long run. Thus, physical activities at school become necessary to pupils.
On the other hand, implementing the system of physical exercise has a psychological impact on youngsters about overweight. 83% of people who are obese because of the lack of exercise, since living in a modern world create the tendency of laziness. Therefore, pupils could have a thorough understanding of the consequences of obesity, and exercise more. Additionally, a healthy generation could then raise the awareness of the public on reducing weight. People could be inspired by these youngsters, hence reducing illness and the increasing strain on the national’s health care system.
In conclusion, several above-mentioned impacts are the main reasons for people to suggest introduce more physical education programs in the school curriculum, in order to reduce the number of obese people and relieve the healthcare’s system.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd relieve the healthcare’s system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47619047619 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96938580701 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591836734694 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0938239 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231079876128 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698597370401 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544126734021 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142990074972 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332361323846 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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