In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that this is the responsibility of governments to solve the problem. What extent do you agree or disagree?
In the nation, childhood obesity and have an imbalanced diet has become the most popular. Although there are people who believe in the responsibility of government must find solutions for these problems. I completely disagree with this point of view.
On the one hand, the rising levels of fast food, junk food, and pre-made food are high on the menu every day. The first, reason is unhealthy eating habits. The parents must control what children eat to make sure that have a healthy diet. Educate children about the detrimental effects of an imbalanced diet and more healthy food choices. For example, Junk food should ban from school menus, and decrease fast food advertising must be limit. As a consequence, they are becoming increasingly obese.
On the other hand, the parents and schools are also responsible for maintaining a low level of obesity among their children. One of the main causes that make children overweight and unhealthy is the choice of daily diet by their parents. A healthy nutritional balanced diet is necessary for every child to grow up normally without having any serious diseases. As the lack of physical exercise can also lead to an obese child, an adequate amount of physical education sessions needs to be held weekly by schools for their young students to keep fit and stay healthy.
To conclude, childhood obesity has become a rising issue in modern society, but I strongly believe that it can still be controlled if the government, parents, and schools get together to help our children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99215686275 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62537231207 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.140692591 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9285714286 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122677924545 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491942648127 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387370520821 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793372250809 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392961285988 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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