In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that this is the responsibility of governments to solve the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In various regions, young people are imitating obesity and an imbalanced lifestyle. While I admit that solving this problem is the responsibility of authorities, I also want to argue that the schools and parents need to take duty to help the governments decrease the rate of children becoming overweight.
On the one hand, because the proportion of the young having chubbiness is rapidly increasing in numerous nations and the governments are able to deal with that trouble. First and foremost, they have enough power to control the advertising of their countries about the food, especially unhealthy food, which is one of the common reasons making young people consume a wider amount of food than they need. As a result, when the children see less commercials about delicate dishes or drinks, they may tend to not require their parents to purchase those for them, which contributes to limiting the fatness of the young. Moreover, the authorities might organize several presentations, which can help consolidate the parents' knowledge and also raise awareness of the consequences of children becoming obese. Therefore, the governments and the parents can combine with each other to manipulate the things consumed by children and reduce the obesity situation of children.
On the other hand, the schools and the parents also need to take responsibility to deal with that issue. Initially, the children’s eating plans are enabled by their mom and dad. The parents can set the appropriate diet programs for their children which still have enough elements for their daily activities, and this also helps the young’s lifestyle become more healthier. Furthermore, most children all around the world are allowed to go to school at the present, and a wide range of them may have breakfast or lunch at school. That is the opportunities for schools to manage the dishes sold there, which can positively affect the children’s eating plans and help them imitate having a balanced diet program.
In conclusion, children are the essential human resources for the future, which is the main reason that the governments, the parents and also the schools have to pay more attention to their health. If they do it well, the new generation will develop this world more successfully.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...sity and an imbalanced lifestyle. While I admit that solving this problem is the ...
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Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...m is the responsibility of authorities, I also want to argue that the schools and...
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Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...imitate having a balanced diet program. In conclusion, children are the essentia...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19293478261 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8101964942 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524456521739 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.160711229 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156984220453 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588139409253 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534897790685 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114293700487 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649149886701 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...sity and an imbalanced lifestyle. While I admit that solving this problem is the ...
^
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...m is the responsibility of authorities, I also want to argue that the schools and...
^
Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...imitate having a balanced diet program. In conclusion, children are the essentia...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19293478261 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8101964942 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524456521739 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.160711229 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.28571428571 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156984220453 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588139409253 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534897790685 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114293700487 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649149886701 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.