In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that this is the responsibility of ⁴governments to solve the problem. What extent do you agree or disagree?
In several regions around the world, the number of children having obesity and being unhealthy is increasing noticeably and it can result in a whale of risky diseases. Some people have a perspective that governments are responsible for solving the problem. I partly concur with this statement and then I will give my own opinion in this essay.
To begin with, the government is the supreme authority of the country who plays an important role in managing and solving several issues for the citizens consisting of curbing the obesity of children. First, the supreme authority or local authority can organize some outdoor activities and encourage the inhabitants to register to join in order to raise the awareness of residents to promote a healthy lifestyle. The typical instance for this is the National Phu Dong Sport Game, it is a competition organized by local governments to reinforce physical health and sport spirit.
Second, the governments should enact a regulation requiring food factories to reduce the amount of obesity-causing substances such as sugar and fat that can result in a whale of distinctive ailments, not only obesity. For example, consuming a huge amount of sugar can lead to heart attack which is a variation of obesity. This phenomenon is often observed in the UK where almost all people are suffering from being overweight. That is the reason why the supreme authority of a country or local should give a hand to decline the obesity issue.
In another case, the combination of parents and schools is also extremely crucial because they are people who directly contact and educate them in daily life. To talk about the parents, they play a significant role in teaching their offspring about practical knowledge including maintaining a healthy lifestyle and avoiding being obese. Taking me as a typical instance for this, my mother always reminds me not to put too much spices into the food and ensure that the amount of sugar and salt intake is moderate because my mother is afraid that my weight is increasing uncontrollably. In terms of schools, the teacher not only impart the knowledge in the textbook, but they also have to teach the student about how to keep fit and control the weight. For instance, my secondary school organizes a sports competition annually in order to encourage students to exercise regularly and raise student’s awareness about preventing themselves from being overweight.
In conclusion, the government plays a critical role in mitigating the issues of obesity and poor health among children, but family involvement is equally essential.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14858490566 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84248018792 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528301886792 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.0058183323 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.4375 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15310967994 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561395041437 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706170182651 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940659649869 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628409554128 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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