In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, the problem of childhood obesity has become more and more serious in some nations. Whilst there is a school of thought that the government should be accountable for tackling this problem, I assume that this is also the obligation of parents.
To commence with, the government could diminish the number of overweight teenagers through certain effective ways. First and foremost, the national authorities should focus on educating children about the detrimental impacts of being obese. For instance, the national budget should be located for some healthcare programs on social media where nutrition experts would give young audiences detailed explanations about obesity’s harmful effects as well as measures to prevent this illness. In addition, the Government also could provide financial support for sports competitions to encourage adolescents to take part in sporty activities. As a result, spending time doing exercise or playing sports would make a significant contribution to the energy-burning process which lessens fat endanger.
However, the responsibility of preventing the young generation from being overweight cannot solely be the government’s onus since parents also play a vital role in forming a child’s healthy lifestyle and balanced eating habits. To be more specific, because it is parents who directly prepare daily meals for their offspring, parents’ knowledge about nutrition and eating routines partly impact teenagers' physical development. Indeed, if parents are keen on more fast food consumption, they are likely to let their children eat the same which results in the obesity problem. In addition, in the case of living with parents who rarely work out and do not take care of their children’s daily activities, teenagers have an inclination to be lazy and prefer less activation. In fact, there are many children spending the whole weekend in front of computers or television and this leads to fat bodies usually getting ill.
In conclusion, overweight illness is destroying many children’s health day by day in some countries. From my point of view, not only the Government but also parents should take action to deal with this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45588235294 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90218119857 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614705882353 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5752349508 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.5 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16282985875 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581484932068 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329134375935 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10711212637 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258834353618 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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