Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Hardly can people deny that a lot of food and drink product contain a great amount of sugar which can cause an abundance of diseases. It is perceived by many that these products have higher prices to discourage human beings to consume sugar. In my opinion, I disagree with this method because I believe there are other solutions for the issue.
From my viewpoint, consuming sugar has negative and positive side. Concerning the positiveness of the issue, we should to make clear that sugar plays a pivotal role for human bodies which provides energy for our brains and bodies. As a result, people cannot stop eating sugar on a daily basis. In addition, not everyone which consumes much sugar will be ill or get sick because it depends on how healthy the bodies are. Indeed, many people eat large amount of sugar but they don’t have diabetes or obesity. On the other hand, some people just use a little sugar but they still get sick. In other words, it depends on many other factors also.
Concerning the negative side of the problem, for those who often use food and drink product which high level of sugar and do not practice exercise often can face potential diseases in the future. That’s why people should consider how much sugar they eat every day to prevent risks to get sick. I have a belief that there are many ways to control the amount of sugar we use every day such as manufacturers should clarify how much sugar in the products to make people be aware if they should use the products or not. This way is much better than increasing the prices of sugary products. Indeed, no one wants that they have to pay more for food because inflation is already high in this modern era.
In conclusion, I agree that the products containing much sugar can cause health issue but I have a strong belief that increasing prices of these products is not a good solution to deal with the trouble. On the other hand, people should do exercises more to improve their health and control level of sugar on their bodies by checking information of the product in terms of sugar level.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...words, it depends on many other factors also. Concerning the negative side of the...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks getting'.
Suggestion: risks getting
...uch sugar they eat every day to prevent risks to get sick. I have a belief that there are ma...
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Line 5, column 602, Rule ID: WANT_THAT_I[6]
Message: Did you mean 'wants them to'?
Suggestion: wants them to
...ices of sugary products. Indeed, no one wants that they have to pay more for food because infla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62264150943 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26783168922 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485175202156 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.456300538 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.882352941 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440562367406 0.244688304435 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137037959357 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826625194141 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289432773797 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455648670876 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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