Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In recent times, a majority of citizens hold the view that there is no point in allocating financial packages to reserve the animal species that are on the verge of extinction. From my point of view, I firmly believe that the local authority should invest more for preserving those animals in danger simply because this actions effect positively to the maintenance of certain species.
On the one hand, there are a myriad of explanations behind the benefits that endangered species could derive from being protected in the zoo, chief of which is the reduced threats from illegal hunters. As a matter of fact, if some wild species are not controlled and saved promptly by the governments as well as the community, they can be the commercial targets for the animal traders due to several valuable body parts of those species. By way of illustration, preserving the elephants on the brink of extinction has gained widespread concern among a large number of countries across the globe. In particular, illegal hunters could deliberately kill the mature elephants to acquire their tusks for the ivory trade. Therefore, when the elephants are kept in a wildlife enclosure with the installation of CCTV cameras and the huge security force, the risk of being hunted will never be a problem with the endangered elephants. Moreover, the construction of zoos might encourage such species to reproduce without any danger from the human.
On the other hand, zoos can be the ideal places for people, especially children, to obtain more knowledge about the lives of wild animals. In fact, with the fast-paced development of urban areas, the tall buildings such as apartments or factories are being raised at an alarming rate. Thanks to the increasing allocation of the authorities to the building of zoos as recreational and educational destinations for the city dwellers, students and adults might have an opportunity to be aware of the way of living of endangered animals in reality life, hence more throughout understandings about the significance of aforementioned species to the perpetuation of the Earth's biodiversity. As a result, more individuals would take part in several volunteer works aimed to organizing campaigns to preserve the endangered species and to prevent animals from illegal hunting as well as illegal trade.
In conclusion, saving the species on the brink of disappearance might have a host of advantages for not only the animals but also the people's awareness of protecting those species.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
... species. On the one hand, there are a myriad of explanations behind the benefits tha...
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Line 2, column 550, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ion has gained widespread concern among a large number of countries across the globe. In particul...
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Line 4, column 135, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...s for not only the animals but also the peoples awareness of protecting those species.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 406.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16256157635 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93825331182 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549261083744 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.01758021 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.230769231 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2307692308 20.7667163134 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152920029851 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540439783297 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339302139087 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102897740846 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216973466309 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.