In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it is widely acknowledge that many products made from animals like food or clothes can be replaced by other modern version. Based on that trend, even though some people say we no longer need to depend on animals to satisfy our lives, I would argue that we still need animal products to some extent, especially in doing research about medicine.
For clothes, animals used to be the major sources of materials to produce our outfit. Hundreds of thousands of years ago, humans knew how to use the skins from big animals like bears or tigers to cover their body to survive during winters. Even in modern time, during twentieth century, rich people and celebrities in many western countries still held the belief of the necessity of using animals that way for making our outfits. Only for last few decades, this has been strongly opposed by many environmentalists, activists, wildlife conservationists, and then politicians and governments because of the immorality of sacrificing animals just to make what people wear and the growing supports for the necessity of natural conservations. Moreover, thanks to the development of science and technology, authentic materials have been discovered and industrially made for the specific purposes of making clothes with many advantages like various colors, cheaper prices and especially no requiring killing animals. Therefore, we now and never will need animals to satisfy our wearing demands.
In case of food, animals are still the sources of what we eat to some extent. Livestock have provided meat for humans since the agricultural revolutions thousands of years ago, and nowadays are still doing that work in most of countries around the world. People have depended on meat and fish for very long time; hence it would be difficult to change people behaviors, and the husbandry will remain significant in our modern economy. Until very recently, artificial meats have been invented with the specific benefit of not depending on raising animals, and therefore are believed to be very promising to replace beef and fork in the coming years. However, more tests and trials need to be done to guarantee whether general public would accept that new types of meats since they still can feel the slight difference between the animal-based version and the lab-growing one in terms of taste. In short, the dependence of food on animals is still significant but there are clear evidence to say that it will not last for long.
Turning to medicine, animals are crucial more than ever. For last 100 years, more diseases have been discovered, along with more medicine having been created to save human lives. Even now, pharmaceutical research and experiments are being conducted worldwide to fight against cancers, cardiovascular diseases and many others. To satisfy the demands of saving patients, drugs need to be tested before being produced at industrial scales and scientists are still using animals like mouse to check the effectiveness of the new medicine in real organism. That is, unfortunately, still the only visible way to make sure the safety of the drug and there is still no other option equally feasible. As a result, modern humans still need animals to make medicine to protect ourselves.
In conclusion, although we have been successful at stopping killing animals for cloths, there is still a long way to do the same thing in case of food, and I still do not see any scenario in which medicine could be developed without using animals in foreseeable future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'acknowledged'.
Suggestion: acknowledged
Nowadays, it is widely acknowledge that many products made from animals li...
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Line 2, column 1032, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put between 'will' and 'need'.
Suggestion: will never need
... killing animals. Therefore, we now and never will need animals to satisfy our wearing demands....
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the countries') or simply say ''most countries''.
Suggestion: most of the countries; most countries
...d nowadays are still doing that work in most of countries around the world. People have depended ...
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Line 3, column 584, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... animals, and therefore are believed to be very promising to replace beef and fork in the coming ...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ls need to be done to guarantee whether general public would accept that new types of meats si...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, in conclusion, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 41.998997996 221% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2946.0 1615.20841683 182% => OK
No of words: 577.0 315.596192385 183% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10571923744 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.20363070211 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7300536117 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 176.041082164 169% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516464471404 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 930.6 506.74238477 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.16724433 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.285714286 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4761904762 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238516768081 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786518248245 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050603056638 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149745143296 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399793838083 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 78.4519038076 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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