More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people think a solution can be to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity has been a global concern for decades. There is a belief that raising the cost of unhealthy food will eliminate the problems. While this solution brings certain virtues, I would contend that there are more suitable measures by governments and families.
On the one hand, raising fattening foods expense is effective to some extent. In today's fast-paced society, the enormous consumption of fast food is primarily because this kind of food tends to be made ubiquitous and ridiculously cheap to lure consumers into purchasing it unreasonably. If governments impose taxes and raise the price of these foods and make nutritious options, in contrast, more widely available, consumers would likely opt for the latter. The decline in affordability undoubtedly minimizes the risk of obesity. However, it is not always the case for junk food addicts as these foods have become an indispensable part of their life and may not be able to restrain from digesting these regardless of the exorbitant prices. They may also conduct illegal acts because obsession is uncontrollable.
On the other hand, I would contend that more drastic measures would involve the joint efforts of governments and families. Governments should propagandize the detrimental impacts of fattening food on public health and emphasize the importance of exercising. For example, the school curriculum can include nutrition lessons to guide students to healthy eating habits. The problem can also be mitigated by families by preparing home-cooked meals and intensely limiting the amount of unhealthy food. Parents should spend time with their children having a sufficient amount of time for physical activities.
In conclusion, while increasing the cost of fattening foods does exert positive effects, I would argue that obesity can be handled more efficaciously by the collaboration of governments and families.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47422680412 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97060304812 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601374570447 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4162231385 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.2 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204272022385 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617529965558 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533694677008 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128298123446 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391626526787 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.