Music plays an important role in society, others think it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals. Discuss both and give your opinion.
The influence of music on individuals and society has been a topic of interest for years. Some maintain that it has the power to create significant social impacts, others believe it is just for entertainment. This essay will discuss both perspectives and elaborate on the reason why I lean toward the former one.
On the one hand, many individuals turn to records and musical performances for relaxation. In fact, the therapeutic effect of music has been proven scientifically as researchers recorded an increase in positive hormones such as endorphin and dopamine, which are known to ease pain, relieve stress and tension in subjects’ brains when they were listening to pieces of music. Moreover, a multitude of individuals opt to share their songs or attend live musical performances alongside their cherished friends and family. Engaging in this practice not only allows them to relish precious moments with loved ones but also fosters a profound sense of belonging and gratification within them.
On the other hand, music can be of significance to the economy and a driving force of social change. In terms of economic effects, companies in the music industry are generating billions of dollars in revenue each year thanks to the sales of albums, tickets to live shows and contracts with advertising agencies. In Korea, for example, music companies have contributed more than $15 billion to the nation’s GDP yearly, highlighting the country’s economic success in recent decades. More significantly, musical masterpieces have contributed to fundamental social developments. A compelling example is songs in the late 60s such as “Run Through the Jungle” by CCR which touched the hearts of Americans and encouraged them to rally against the Vietnam War, demanding the complete withdrawal of their troops out of the Southeast Asian country.
In conclusion, both sides of the argument have their own merits. However, I consider the influence of music on fostering social change and economic development to be remarkable even though it might just be a stress reliever to some people. In my opinion, governments are to provide not only formal encouragement but also financial support to musicians, singers and producers so as to enable their talents to flourish.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 375, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ort to musicians, singers and producers so as to enable their talents to flourish.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29085872576 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99669735823 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612188365651 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.826849105 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.333333333 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171579891326 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594662112897 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472410801964 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105740443926 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525126399183 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.29 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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